Yamato’s Hypnotic Night


(Note: This story is part of an ongoing series of One Piece stories)
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“Ahahaha. And you’re really sure I can try those things on?” asked Yamato with sparkling eyes. The horned woman looked from one outfit to the next.

 

“Sure, why not?!” retorted Nami casually as she held a nearly see-through dress in front of her, “I doubt that the Celestial dick we took them from is interested in them anymore. He has other things on his mind now!” she said with a cheeky grin. After examining her reflection in the mirror, the orange haired navigator threw the dress on a pile to her left, which were made up of all the outfits she wasn’t interested in.

 

“Mhm!” Yamato nodded and slipped out of her clothes. Her voluptuous tits and ass sprung free. Nami couldn’t help but stare at her crewmate’s two mounds and imposing butt. One of the breasts alone was easily twice as big as Nami’s entire head and topped off with pink and incredibly stiff nipples.

 

Just as quickly as she stripped out of her first outfit, Yamato put on the new one. It was a bikini, for lack of better terms, which consisted of two golden rings. One was under her tits and the other directly above her areolas. A white cloth made of the finest silk and thinner than her fingernails was the only thing that kept her nipples hidden. She wore golden bracelets adorned with purple amethysts on her arms and around her thigh and a choker with the same motif around her throat.

 

Nami whistled approvingly and watched as the taller woman spun around, her hands above her head, to see how she looked in the mirror. The black thong that failed to cover Yamato’s pussy dug deep into her wet and warm cunt.

 

“Mmmmh~! Not bad.” complimented Robin from her place on the bed. Next to her, Carrot writhed in pleasure as Robin pushed three fingers into the Mink’s soaking wet pussy, making her moan for more.

 

“You think so?” asked Yamato. She leaned her head towards one side and inspected the bracelets. “Not really a fan of all that metal and how constrictive it feels!”

 

“I mean, they are clothes made for those perverted Celestial Dragon’s enjoyment after all.” Nami replied after looking at a pair of black high heels with the heels made of solid diamond. “There’s no way in hell that they are meant for his slaves!”

 

Robin nodded and laid down on her back, holding black panties with two inverted dildos attached to them above her head, “Though I hate to admit it but they are quite talented when it comes to creating “toys” for their slaves.” she said loud enough to be heard above the white bunny girl to her left. The two dildos then started to vibrate after she summoned a new hand that pushed on the remote controller that controlled them. Pressing the controller again caused the dildos to vibrate even faster. She smirked and dangled the panties in front of Carrot’s face. “I bet you would like them though, right?”

 

MMMMMMH!!! MMMMHHHMMMMM!!!!!” Carrot nodded and moaned against one of Robin’s hands that kept her mouth sealed. Four other hands at the corner of the bed held the Mink’s arms and legs stretched to the side, leaving her completely helpless and at her crewmates’ mercy. “PHIIIIIIIIEEEEEEE!!!!!!!!!” saliva ran down Robin’s hand as Carrot’s squeal echoed through the room. Another pair of hands twisted and pulled on her painfully stiff nipples, causing Carrot to cry in sheer delight and orgasmic bliss.

 

“Shhhh!” Robin hushed the other girl and gracefully caressed her flushed cheek, “We can’t let our crewmates know what is happening in here, now can we?!” she asked rhetorically and let a mouth bloom in the palm of her house that covered the Mink’s mouth. While Nami told Robin and Yamato about Carrot’s predicament, she wasn’t too keen on letting the men of the crew learn about it just yet.

 

HMMMMMM!!!!!” moaned Carrot before granting Robin’s tongue entry to her mouth. Their tongues swirled around one another, giving the bunny no chance for any other loud noise.

 

In the meantime, Yamato stripped out of her outfit and looked through the pile of other options. Nami was more than happy to take the golden bracelets and choker for herself and eyed them with Belly symbols replacing her pupils. While most of the treasure they looted the other day would obviously be exchanged for money, Nami wouldn’t throw away perfectly fine and luxurious clothes if they met her standards!

 

OOOOOH!!!” Yamato jumped up excitedly, making her tits bounce up and down with the motion, as she found another beautiful and exotic looking set of clothes. Within seconds she put on a necklace with pink flowers, pasties with a coconut motif and had her privates covered with a bikini bottom that resembled straw.

 

When Robin saw how she struggled to put on the decorative vines around her legs, she summoned another pair of extra hands and helped her with it. The older woman then put the artificial flowers that were part of the outfit in the Oni Princess’ hair and woven, artificial strands of grass around her hands, giving Yamato a rather exotic and enticing appearance.

 

Yamato’s eyes beamed with excitement as she looked down at her body. She hefted her tits and examined the pasties that covered her nipples. “Thanks Robin! This looks so cool!!!”

 

“Hahaha. No problem.” the dark haired woman laughed into the back of her hand, glad to see her crewmate smile like this. Shifting her attention back towards Carrot, she pulled at the Mink’s nipples even harder, twisting them roughly into opposing directions and making her squeal into the second mouth. By now her bed was thoroughly soaked by the blonde’s overflowing pussy juices.

 

MMMH… WOBINNNN…!!!” slurred Carrot into Robin’s hand-mouth and bucked her hips upwards in frantic ecstasy. Robin pulled her hand away from the Mink’s mouth and watched as their saliva dropped from its palm into Carrot’s open mouth. “Please… let me test those panties. I wanna! I wanna! I-”

 

“Yes, yes, yes.” Robin said and covered the blonde’s mouth again with her hand. With practiced ease, she then put her friend’s legs into the panties and pulled them up. She inserted the two dildos into her ass and pussy before smiling down on Carrot. “Now, let’s see what this baby can do!”

 

Yamato turned around and looked at her own reflection in the giant mirror that covered one side of the room’s walls. She smirked confidently and squeezed her own firm, yet soft butt, “Ohhhh, this looks SO good!” her eyes wandered over the various other outfits that she yet had to try on. “So many decisions! Hahahaha! I love it!”

 

“Ehm… I don’t wanna spoil your fun or anything…” said Nami after taking a glance at the clock at the wall. In her hands she held two bikinis with threads made out of pure gold and silver woven into the fabric. “But shouldn’t you be on your way out? You and Brook are on guard duty tonight after all.”

 

AH! You’re right!” Yamato jumped up, causing her tits to jiggle as she ran towards the door. She opened the door and immediately slammed it shut again as a surprisingly cold breeze hit her like her father’s fist, “Right, I should put on something warmer.”

 

To the surprise of both Nami and Robin, the white haired girl switched from the exotic bikini set into nothing more than tight fitting yoga pants and an orange top that left most of her midriff and even her underboobs completely exposed.

 

“There, much better.” said Yamato, shouldered her kanabo, Takeru, and stepped into the dark of the night once more, leaving the two other Straw Hats to exchange looks of disbelief.

 

A bazillion stars and a beautiful gibbous moon illuminated the ship and the ocean around her. Their reflections danced in the water, letting it sparkle and glitter in their mythical light. Inhaling the fresh and salty air around her, Yamato walked the stairs up towards where the beautiful sounds of a shamisen were coming from. The melody soothed her mind and drew her closer towards the skeleton that was leaning against the main mast.

 

“Ah, good evening young lady!” greeted the old skeleton as soon as she stepped into his field of view. How he was able to see without having eyeballs, she did not know but that was just one of the many mysteries she liked about the world outside of Onigashima! He tipped his top hat and nodded at her, giving her the best lipless smile that he could.

 

“Sorry for taking so long. We were just testing out some clothes from the treasure.” Yamato apologized before he even said anything and leaned against the white handrail. The wood felt rough against her smooth skin. Her eyes wandered over the vast and seemingly endless ocean.

 

Brook leaned the shamisen against the mast and raised both hands in a placatory gesture, “No problem. I already imagined that it would take longer when Nami called all you girls into the quarters.” he stretched his long body, causing his joints to pop. “On that note, may I see your panties?”

 

Letting out a sigh, Yamato turned around. Nami already warned her that he would ask this question sooner or later, “Sorry, but I didn’t wear any today.” she pulled her pants down, granting him sight of her almost completely trimmed pussy. “See?”

 

Blood gushed out of the skeleton’s nose as he fell on his back with a loud THWOP! His legs stood up straight into the air and a bump formed on the back of his head, “Yo- YOHOHOHO. 90 degrees! It hurts! 90 degrees hurt!” then, as easily as he fell down, he rose to his feet again. A red, throbbing bump sat on top of his afro and blood sullied his purple suit. “Such a shame. You have my gratitude regardless!”

 

“Hahahaha! You’re welcome! It’s the least I could do.” said the Oni Princess who waited until he finished bowing down before pulling her pants up again. “So, what do we do now?”

 

It was the first time as a member of the Straw Hat Pirates that she had to work during the night. And with all that stuff regarding the loot they stole from the Celestial Dragon, none of her crewmates had the time to explain to her what she was supposed to do.

 

“Ah, that’s quite simple.” Brook picked up his shamisen again and stared off into the distance as he thought about new songs. “We mainly have to make sure that we stay on course and warn the others if we see any enemy ships, islands or something weird is happening.”

 

“So cool!!!!” her eyes beamed with excitement after hearing this very basic explanation. She crossed her arms under her chest and nodded knowingly. “Okay. I’ll go check and see if everything’s okay with the ship then!”

 

Brook watched as the woman began with her patrol across the ship and knelt down, “So overly enthusiastic… Ahhhh, to be young again!” he picked up the bachi that he put down when Yamato greeted him. “Now, where were we… Ah, yes! Something passionate!”

 

The tour through the ship was uneventful. Zoro continued lifting weights in the training room underneath the crow’s nest even while napping. Sanji flirted with her for a moment after leaving the kitchen and before going to bed. A thousand different pieces of metal and wood laid spread throughout Usopp’s factory and Franky’s workshop where hours earlier both men tinkered on new weapons and other equipment.

 

Her tour ended at the helm of the ship right as another wave splashed against the ship, making her sway with the motions, ‘I’m finally free. Far away from Onigashima and in Ace’s brother’s crew no less!’ she couldn’t help but smile from ear to ear as she jumped on to the figure head. Arching her back, Yamato inhaled as much salty air as she could before… “WOOOOOHOOOOOOO!!!!!” her scream of happiness echoed through the silent night, causing nearby fish and even a Sea King to swim away from the ship as fast as possible.

 

On the other side of the ship, Brook merely smiled after hearing the newest crew member’s ecstatic scream. Hearing the joy in her voice inspired him to put even more passion into this new song! He closed his eyes and the world around him disappeared as he concentrated on nothing else than his instrument.

 

♪♪♪ ♪♪♪ ♪♪♪

 

I’ll finally do it Ace! I’ll travel the world just like Oden did!’ tears of joy streamed down her face and she chuckled happily. Out of nowhere, the hairs on her arms suddenly stood on edge as she became aware of Brook’s music echoing all over the ship.

 

It was a quick tune that vibrated through her entire body and caused her to smile even brighter. She swayed her head to the beat and listened to the all too familiar sounds of a shamisen. Given her upbringing on Onigashima, she was accustomed to hearing people play the instrument. Black Maria and the Oiran Komurasaki were two such women who used the shamisen as if it was just another extension of their body and captivated the hearts of every person who listened to their performances. The fact that Brook managed to master the basics of the instrument in such a short amount of time made her respect for him grow even more!

 

♪♪♪ ♪♪♪ ♪♪♪

 

“Hnnnnnnngh~!” Yamato went on all fours as her arousal skyrocketed. Her tits pressed against the yellow wood of the figure head. Takeru slipped out of her fingers and rolled across the lion’s head, almost falling into the dark ocean beneath as the juices of her growing lust sprayed out of her pussy. ‘Godddddd… that feels… that feels good!!!!

 

She slipped her fingers past the now soaking wet fabric of her pants and shoved them into the hot entrance of her vagina. Arching her back, Yamato looked with crossed eyes at the beautiful night sky above, “What is this? I feel so… so HORNY!” she spread her pussy with her index and ring finger and began stroking the inner folds of it with her middle finger.

 

The fingers of her other hand found their way around the grip of Takeru before placing the weapon between her tits. The studded metal rubbed over the sensitive skin of her mammaries and her stomach as she brought it closer and closer to her thirsty cunt. The wet fabric of her pants was pressed even deeper into her moist hole as she pushed the weapon against them.

 

HMMMMMMMM!!!!!” humping her ass into the empty air behind her, Yamato couldn’t help but get hornier by the second, ‘Ohhhhhhhhh… more!!!’ with trembling fingers she managed to pull down her pants far enough so that her pussy was exposed to the chill air around her. Grabbing Takeru with both hands at the handle, she pressed the very tip of the weapon into her gushing pussy!

 

It took a while for her to grow accustomed to the weapon’s sheer girth but she soon started to shove it in and out of her pussy. The SLICK SLICK SLICK of it felt like a music all on its own to her and combined into a beautiful symphony with Brook’s music. Her pussy clenched like a vice around Takeru, making it hard for her to even move the weapon around.

 

FUCCCCCKKKKK!!!!!” her tongue lolled out of her mouth and she panted like a dog in heat, her breath actually steaming out of her mouth! “THIS FEELS SO GOOOOOOOD!!!!!” she moaned into the night and without a care in the world about who might hear her. A wave crashed against the ship, dousing her from head to toe in water and cooling her off a bit. But not enough to stop with what she was doing!

 

Her usually flat stomach visibly distended as she shoved the weapon even further into her pussy!

 

She stuck her hand underneath her top and twirled one of her painfully stiff nipples between her digits all while she continued riding the make-shift dildo, “NOT ENOUGH! MORE! I NEED MORE!!!!” she screamed as another orgasm washed over her.

 

Ah, the audience will love this!’ As if he heard her pleas, Brook readjusted the pegs at the tip of the shamisen’s neck before starting to play again. The comparatively slow rhythm of the first part was replaced by a much quicker and even more intense beat that vibrated not only through her body but her very soul!

 

♪♪♪ ♪♪♪ ♪♪♪

 

“Hm?” Yamato blinked in surprise as she felt like there was something in front of her. Space itself seemed to contort as out of nowhere as she suddenly found herself face to face with a cock that was even thicker than Takeru! She could even see a reflection of her surprised face in the red shining head of the massive phallus! “Holy mother of…!!!!” she pulled the weapon out of her pussy, resulting in a wet PLOP.

 

After using Observation Haki, Yamato was more than certain that the thing, whatever it now might be, wasn’t real and just a mere fragment of her imagination. Probably caused by her own desire and the skeleton’s hypnotic music. And yet… she reached out with her free hand towards the phallus in front of her but halted a mere inch before her fingers touched the crimson red tip. ‘Will this illusion fade away if I come in contact with i-

 

♪♪♪ ♪♪♪ ♪♪♪

 

MMMPPPPPPPHHHH!!!!” before she could even finish her train of thought, Brook’s song became even faster. The cock in front of her moved forward and it felt like the length was actually shoved down her throat! She even felt her jaw ache as she instinctively opened her mouth as wide as possible to get as much of the dong inside of her at the same time, a cock that she didn’t even notice existed was shoved deep into her so far neglected and starved ass! “GHUG???

 

Despite knowing that the cocks weren’t real, she still experienced unbelievable pleasure out of them throbbing and moving inside of her. She could FEEL them thrusting in and out of her, making her unable to close her mouth even though she knew better! The imaginary lengths moved in accordance to Brook’s rhythm and probed even deeper into her, making her squirm and shudder in joy!

 

THE OUSHIDE WURLD ISH SHO COOOOL!!!!” she slurred around the non-existent dick in her mouth. Her eyes started to sparkle again as she bobbed her head back and forth, “THAD SHUCH SCHINGSH EVN EXISHT…” tugging on her nipples, Yamato relished in the sensation of the illusionary dicking and arched her back. “GHUG, GHUGH, HMMMPH!!! MUUUGH, GLUPH, PHHHHWAAAAAA!!!!!! MOAR, DISH PHEELSH SHO GHUUD!!!!!!

 

The two dicks felt like they met at the center of her body, making the white haired woman spasm and writhe in pleasure like crazy. The strong hold she had on her nipples caused the pink nubs to turn blue as she pulled them until their shape resembled snow cones. Brook’s melody caused them to pound her holes even faster now, making her cum every time she felt them move!

 

YEPH!!! FASHTER!!!!!! HAWDER!!!! MOAR CAWKSH!!!!!!” it felt like it had been ages since she last felt such pleasure. The last time she could ever remember such feelings were the nights she spent with Ace! Tears of joy rolled down her cheeks as the symphony reached its conclusion!

 

♪♪♪ ♪♪♪ ♪♪♪

 

YEEEEEEEEEEPH!!!!!!!!!” her body trembled uncontrollably as the as of yet biggest climax of the night surged through her. Her juices rained down on the wooden ground below and ran down her legs.

 

Just as soon as they appeared, both cocks disappeared again, leaving Yamato kneeling on all fours as she relished in the first orgasm that she experienced after being freed from her father’s clutches. Through tear-filled eyes, the Oni Princess looked into the starry sky above and couldn’t help but laugh, “Can you see me Ace?” she asked, her voice nothing more than a whisper. “I’m finally free!”

 

“Ahhhhh…” on the other side of the ship, Brook slowly opened his eyes and put his instrument away. After concentrating on nothing more than his music for over an hour, everything else felt strange and unusual to him, “Yes, that was good with room for improvement.” he said and wrote the notes that he just played onto a piece of paper. After writing it all down, he looked at it one last time and put the pen to where his lips would be, “Hmmmm… But what do I call it… I know! ECSTASIA! A song that makes the blood boil and warms the coldest of hearts!” he then halted for a second and stared at the moon above him.

 

“Oh! But I don’t have any heart or blood! YOHOHOHOHOHO!

 


(Story by: Mr. Akrononym)

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way2dumb2live
way2dumb2live
5 months ago

Nicely done. Still though, I have a question regarding all your comments: what’s with your Usopp hate boner?
Ok, maybe hate boner isn’t the right word, but it’s obvious that you try to avoid putting him into the story. Just look at the Reiju comment. “I’m not sure I wanna team her up with Usopp.” Is that saying you don’t think they mix well, or is it how I read it, “I don’t want to waste her on Usopp.”
Look, I get it. Usopp’s really hard to write, especially in lemons. Believe me, I know where your coming from. So I wouldn’t blame you if you aren’t going to do much with Usopp. Thankfully, I have lots of leftover ideas for a Usopp lemon I tried to make. I say tried because I scrapped the ideas for my Usopp x Ulti fic, and honestly I don’t regret the decision.
(1/2)

way2dumb2live
way2dumb2live
5 months ago
Reply to  way2dumb2live

(2/2)
As I was saying, here are some of my ideas that you could use for Usopp in this series:

  1. Have Usopp meet Ulti and then they start to hate fuck each other. Last time I checked, you haven’t done any hate fucking fics, so this could be something entirely new to both you and the readers.
  2. Usopp creates loads of different sex supplies. Real futa pills, healthy cocaine, stripper poles that can bend unnaturally, bras that can change shape and size, the possibilities are endless. How does he do all this, you might be asking? Simple, because of his intelligence and pop greens. Seriously, Usopp is smart. Smarter than this community likes to admit. I can completely see him able to make all of those things.
  3. Have Usopp’s inferiority complex carry over to this series. This is post Wano, and you said it yourself in I think the Carrot fic right before the site was taken down that you read the manga. So, we both know that Usopp has done nothing in Wano. This is probably (most likely) going to bring back his inferiority complex which I think will be explored in Elbaf. BUT, what if we explore it now? What if Usopp constantly tries to help the crew in every way he could think of throughout the series to make up for Wano? You said it yourself that this takes place a week after Wano, so we can still explore this idea. This is going to be Usopp’s big arc throughout this series, at least for one arc. This is all going to culminate in part 4:
  4. Usopp makes so much money he buys Busteez. Now, I know this sounds like something Nami would do, but what if Usopp gives Busteez to the crew? We could give him a crazed look on his face, constantly asking if they still love him, and the crew could have a look of shock, seeing what’s happened to Usopp. Of course this doesn’t have to be the crew’s first reaction. You could have Nami go crazy with money, and then have Usopp go back to work. But then, the crew start abusing their VIP passes, while Usopp is left to clean up the mess. This could give Usopp a lot of self-made pressure (we’ll come back to this). At the end of the day, it’s up to you.
  5. This one is a fun one but I just couldn’t find a way to add it into my fic without making Usopp busted, so I decided to add it on the list. Wanna hear it? Usopp learns about his word powers, and decides to go on a frenzy throughout the series. Honestly, you could do so much with this concept. Hell, you could even have all the self-made pressure get to him and then he just goes on a frenzy of power. I’ll admit, this is a hard one to properly handle, but there’s a reason why I’m suggesting it to you, and it’s not because I can’t do it.
  6. Usopp’s observation haki canonically is the size of Dressrosa. Let’s be real here, Busteez island isn’t as big as Dressrosa. What am I getting at? What if you have Usopp as the narrator, constantly narrating over everyone having sex. This would be even funnier if the characters could hear him. Now, this is making Usopp seem like a villain, right? Well…
  7. Usopp becomes the villain of the series. Essentially, he would be a total dick to everyone on Busteez island. Why though? Well, this is where the comment takes form. Remember how Usopp and Ulti hate fuck? Well, what if they slowly fall in love over this? By doing so, Ulti notices the pressure Usopp has been under, and she believes it’s because of his crew. So, she tells him how it’s his crew’s fault that he’s like this. Now, I know Usopp wouldn’t believe Ulti, especially after his arc in Enies Lobby, but look at it this way: The crew didn’t pay him any mind when he bought Busteez for them. That was his gift, and they constantly abuse it and leave him hanging. This, again, causes his self-pressure to keep helping them, since he figured that Busteez just wasn’t enough. But Ulti sees it differently. She sees that Usopp has been doing everything for the crew and they’ve just been walking all over him. So, he decides to become the villain, with Ulti by his side.
  8. Now, onto Ulti. This makes her sound like the villain, and you very easily could do this, but keep in mind that she has Usopp’s best interests at heart. The thing is, we should apply the vice versa as well. After all that hate fucking, Usopp and Ulti start to fall in love. You could show this with sometimes both of them narrating over some sex scenes or with them cuddling and watching the night sky together. BUT, this is to give Usopp and Ulti their reasons for doing what they’ll do.
  9. By this point, you’re probably thinking, “This is well put together, but why would the Straw Hats do that to Usopp? He’s their nakama!” Well, that’s true. Except, this is all started because Usopp wanted to make up for what he did on Wano (or lack there of). The thing is, the crew passes it off as no big deal, and you could have one of them say this line, “It doesn’t matter if you’re weak, we’ll just pick up the slack!” What seems like a way of telling Usopp to relax unintentionally starts him down this path. He doesn’t want to be weak. He doesn’t want to be a burden. So, he starts inventing more and more innovative things. Real futas, clothes that can change their size and shape, maybe you could add hardlight tech (basically holograms you can touch like in any sci-fi movie ever), these are revolutionary ideas! But still, the crew pays no mind to them, because Usopp’s still Usopp, and that’s all that matters. To them, it doesn’t matter if he’s weak or worthless. But the way they put it off just feels so condescending. But not Ulti though. Ulti just says it as blunt as possible, and eventually, she tells him how he can improve. Slowly, but surely, they fall in love.

So, that’s my idea. If you don’t want to do it, that’s fine. I’ll just leave these ideas here, completely sad that no one would take them. Oh shit, I didn’t mean to guilt trip you. Sorry if I did.

Still, none of this explains the elephant in the room. Why didn’t I do this? Well, it’s simple. I don’t have the experience. The most chapters I’ve ever written in a fic is 2 and the most words is 10k, and I haven’t even finished that one. it will also be the first fic I ever completed. The point is, I have no experience with long fics. I can make some short fics, but I just don’t have the skills to do these ideas yet. But you do. You have the ability to do these things, to make these ideas real. One of the biggest complaints from last time was how you didn’t use the other Straw Hats enough and how you only used Luffy, Zoro and Sanji (I’m not counting the girls since of course you’d use them often). Well, with this idea you can spread everything out. Give the people more side character love and have each of the side characters react to Usopp and Ulti basically becoming king and queen of Busteez, and then for the finale, you could have both the crew and Usopp apologize to each other. Usopp for taking things too far, and the crew for not appreciating him for what he’s done. It would be a good moment that reminds the readers of what One Piece is truly about: nakamaship.

Now, if you feel like this is too much to handle, I’ve got you. I’m willing to write some of the chapters. Not all of them, I’m still working on my fic, but if you choose any of these ideas, I’ll be more than happy to help you out in any way I can.

(Also, just to point out, at no point should Usopp leave the crew or even attempt to leave the crew. All he does is distance himself from the crew until he and Ulti become the villains.)

way2dumb2live
way2dumb2live
5 months ago
Reply to  way2dumb2live

What the hell, did my comment not register or something? Fuck.

Mr. Akrononym
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Mr. Akrononym
5 months ago
Reply to  way2dumb2live

1. Thanks for your highly detailed input. I appreciate it!
2. I have nothing against Usopp, nor do I think that he’s harder to write than other characters. I might not like him as much as the rest of the crew and think that certain parts of the fan base overdo it with praising him but I don’t hate him.
3. The reason I don’t wanna put him with Reiju (and certain other girls) is because I have other plans/partners for them. Those girls include among others Reiju, Monet and Ulti.
4. Not really interested in the Busteez idea because it already is such a prominent setting in other series here. The core premise of this One Piece story will be a bit different.
5. I have NO skill whatsoever as a writer. I only started writing last year.

Thanks for your kind words and ideas though. You can always try writing your own stories though. If I can write decent stories, everyone can!

way2dumb2live
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way2dumb2live
5 months ago
Reply to  Mr. Akrononym

Okay, I understand you reasons for the first 3. At the end of the day, it’s your story, do what you want to. I just want this series to improve in the aspects that it was lacking last time, that being plot. Although I have no idea what you’ll be doing with Ulti, did you really have to completely write off all my ideas?

Onto #4. From what you said, we won’t be getting Busteez period (or at least not for while). I can see why you would do this since admittedly it was getting pretty obnoxious. Still though, if you ever plan on adding it back, try doing something similar with Usopp.

As for #5, you’re lying to yourself. You’ve got talent, much more than I do. And that’s coming from a guy who started writing 2 years ago. You do so many things that barely any of us could do. For example, you stick to a schedule, know your limits and try not to write too much. Those are things that even I can’t do.

Believe me, I want to do those ideas myself, but I just don’t know if I can. Hell, how do you even become a writer on here?

Mr. Akrononym
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Mr. Akrononym
5 months ago
Reply to  way2dumb2live

I’m not totally against your ideas. They just have Usopp too much as a plot-centric character in them. For this series, Luffy (and a few other characters) will get to play a bit more important roles. Sure, I can and will definitely include sex scenes with Usopp and the other Straw Hats but he won’t be the driving point. If the artwork allows for it, I can definitely see a hate fuck scene between him and maybe Ulti. But she will hopefully end up with another man if things go right. And him narrating/commentating sex scenes COULD be done basically whenever I feel like it, just without the plot relevance that you want (with him acting like a villain).

A place like “Busteez Island” could be brought up but I’m no the biggest fan of it. It would be way too similar to the Ranko Island stuff of the Naruto series and SailorIo’s first Fairy Tail series. And since there aren’t as many (if at all) One Piece artworks with a club background, there isn’t a reason for me to make Busteez a club as well.

As for how I became a writer, that’s actually quite simple. I joined Rtenzo’s Patreon one and a half years ago and when he didn’t release that many One Piece artworks/stories, despite it winning in the polls there, I simply asked if I could write some stories then.

A Smort Person
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5 months ago
Reply to  Mr. Akrononym

Ya gotta admit though, his ideas have some merit. The Usopp stuff definitely needs to be toned down a touch, but Usopp x Ulti sounds like a blast to read. OP also brought up a good point about how you constantly rely on the monster trio and while I didn’t want to say anything, it was getting pretty boring on how the male characters were always them. Pretty sure he just wanted to bring in some variety and just stuck with Usopp.

Besides, his Usopp x Ulti storyline sounds like a one in a million idea. The buying Busteez thing is too far fetched, even for someone as lucky as Usopp, but otherwise the story is there. Have Usopp and Ulti meet one time, they become fuck buddies, they learn about each other and Ulti realizes that Usopp’s crew have been making Usopp the way he is. Then, Usopp starts to distance himself more and more from the crew, they eventually take notice, and then you could do what OP suggested earlier. This doesn’t even have to be the main plot, it would work much better as a side plot if we’re being honest.

Also, “But she will hopefully end up with another man if things go right
Hopefully? Did you really have to spit in his face after all he’s done for you?

Mr. Akrononym
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5 months ago
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I said “hopefully” because nothing is set in stone yet. I can’t write Ulti scenes with Usopp, Franky, Kid or Bartolomeo if the guy in the artwork doesn’t have black, blue, red or green pubic hair. If Ulti is constantly drawn together with a guy with blonde pubic hair, then she will obviously have sex with Sanji, Killer or someone else who fits that hair color. Even the ideas that I have for this series fall under this restriction. I can’t have Ulti, Reiju and Monet getting fucked by the guys that I would like, if the pubic hair doesn’t fit! So no, I didn’t spit in anyone’s face. I merely said it as it is.

Also, did we really read the same series?! When did I rely on the Monster trio? For the last stories of the first One Piece series: Shyarly paizuri – her partner was Jinbe; Carrot paizuri – her partner were Sanji (because of blonde pubic hair) and Chopper; Tashigi and Robin blowjob – Zoro and Smoker; Nami and Vivi hotdogging – Robin and Pell; Vivi and Camie double paizuri – Usopp; Hancock pin up – Smoker; Hancock instant loss – Kid; etc. I wrote Luffy, Zoro and Sanji only into the story when the guys in the artwork had the pubic hair for it. If you really want a series that relies on one character, look no further than the MHA series here. Not to praise myself too much but I’m pretty sure that I balanced it quite well.

way2dumb2live
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5 months ago
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Hopefully? Are you fucking kidding me? You call yourself a writer yet you try to pull that shit?

Edit: At least someone’s defending me

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A Smort Person
A Smort Person
5 months ago
Reply to  way2dumb2live

Okay, that does it. Both of you have good intentions, but you’re both in the wrong.

@Mr. Akrononym, you went too far with that line. Just because you don’t like that idea doesn’t mean you have to insult what way2dumb2live did. At the end of the day, look at what he gave you. You said it yourself, these points are very detailed. Why don’t you consider taking some of the into the series, since at the end of the day way2dumb2live is trying to help you. Ffs, he put so much time and effort into those ideas, you could at the very least give some of them a shot. At the end of the day, a customer is entitled to their opinion and they can give the company criticism or ideas. If those ideas/criticism work, then why don’t you try incorporating them? If they don’t, oh well, you can’t win em all.

As for you, , you are not, and have never been entitled to what Mr. Akrononym puts in his fics. You are allowed to give him ideas, but by no means does he have to include them. You are right to be angry. He looked over all your ideas and gave them a hard no even after you put what seemed to be hours of work into them. With that being said, couldn’t you at least try to look at the line in a different way? What if he just miss-phrased it? Mistakes happen, that’s a fact of life.

Now, are we good?

way2dumb2live
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way2dumb2live
5 months ago
Reply to  A Smort Person

Of course I’m fine with him. I’m a writer too, so I know that sometimes you just can’t add everything everyone wants. My main problem was that he tossed aside all of my ideas and told me to do it even though I explained to him multiple times why I couldn’t do it. His response just felt so tone deaf. Anyways, I’m willing to say it’s water under the bridge.

Mr. Akrononym
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5 months ago
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I explained what I meant with “hopefully” under the other guy’s comment. If I offended you in any way, I’m sorry. Please know that this wasn’t my intention.

Don’t know what me being a writer has to do with it though. Unless the artworks were already released on Patreon, I only get them a week or so before the story will be released. I have roughly a day to come up with a plot for that story and spend the evenings after work writing them. Most of the plot I come up with only comes to my mind as I write it. There is no grand plan or concept behind it because it all comes down to the artworks I’m getting. If I get ten obvious Nami X Luffy artworks in a row, then I can hardly have the story be around Sanji, Zoro or Usopp.

Dan
Dan
5 months ago

@Mr. Akrononym

Could we get some works of Usopp and/or Reiju in the near future?

Preferably both?

Mr. Akrononym
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5 months ago
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I can’t promise anything. I don’t have an artwork with Reiju so far and if she appears, I’m not sure if I wanna team her up with Usopp. I have other plans for her in this story.

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steazier
steazier
5 months ago

YOO yamato post

Mr. Akrononym
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5 months ago
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Hahaha. Glad to see that you like it.

souljamantwn
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5 months ago

Words cannot express how happy I am for a new One Piece chapter! Yamato AND Carrot both joining the crew is something I always thought was gonna happen at the end of Wano arc. I honestly couldn’t choose between the two I legit like them both.

Yamato and Nami trying clothes while Robin toys with the rabbit mink in heat was very hot. I know they wanna keep her to themselves right now but hopefully the guys get to have their fun with her too.

Yamato casually showing Brook her pussy was both hot and funny with his reaction. That new shamisen could lead to some interesting story bits maybe even a huge orgy with the entire crew. Only time will tell I suppose.

Mr. Akrononym
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5 months ago
Reply to  souljamantwn

I’m actually kinda glad that I didn’t get the chance to write all that more One Piece. I don’t like too speculate too much on certain stuff but making Carrot and Yamato members of the crew were easy ways to always keep them nearby for chapters with them. One Piece is REALLY hard to write since most girls don’t know about one another or simply live on the other side of the globe and are actually very far away from the crew.

And yeah, the men of the crew will get in on the action as well sooner or later. Glad you like the stuff with Brook. I really wanted to make use of him since he’s one of my favorite crew members and rarely gets the chance to shine in these stories.

Thank you for your input. I appreciate it as always.

mndhanson017
mndhanson017
5 months ago

Ugh, the curves of Yamato, so fucking hot! Love the artwork, it’s colored differently like a matte finish, a good start to include Yamato in potential Straw Hat orgy stories, too, love it all!!!

Mr. Akrononym
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5 months ago
Reply to  mndhanson017

Rtenzo certainly made a fantastic job in drawing this artwork. Make sure to tell him your thoughts about it under the artwork as well.

Hey
Hey
5 months ago

Finally more one piece this was great but I would love to see more luffy and luffy x nami since that was my fav chapter before the sight crashed anyway great job hopefully more chapters

Mr. Akrononym
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5 months ago
Reply to  Hey

Luffy is a bit tricky to write but he’ll play a more important role in this series than the last. Don’t know when his time to shine will be though.

Whitis
Whitis
5 months ago

Finally, it’s been a while since their has been a one piece update.

Mr. Akrononym
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5 months ago
Reply to  Whitis

Yeah, good things take time after all. There might have been a misunderstanding between me and Rtenzo, which caused the chapter to be delayed a bit.

Whitis
Whitis
5 months ago
Reply to  Mr. Akrononym

Well besides all that 10/10.

Anono
Anono
5 months ago

Really nice chapter, I like that the first two chapters are more yuri/solo focused and don’t immediately jump into sex with the boys. Good job on this one and hopefully we get more before long!

Mr. Akrononym
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5 months ago
Reply to  Anono

Thanks for your kind words. It’s always a pleasure to write One Piece. The next one is already written, though I don’t know when it will come out.

Paul
Paul
5 months ago
Reply to  Mr. Akrononym

What’s the next one about? And who is going to fuck? Is it luffy and nami or Robin or Yamato or somebody else?

Mr. Akrononym
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5 months ago
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I’ll say that much: at least one Straw Hat member will be involved.

Paul
Paul
5 months ago
Reply to  Mr. Akrononym

Is it luffy or zoro or Sanjii ?

Mr. Akrononym
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Mr. Akrononym
5 months ago
Reply to  Paul

I guess you’ll just have to wait and see…

Han
Han
5 months ago

Are we getting a yamato x luffy chapter

I love the relationship they had in the anime

Mr. Akrononym
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5 months ago
Reply to  Han

Most likely when more artworks with her will come.

I just wanted to use Brook in this chapter since I can hardly use him in most other scenarios.